Phixel
It's really awesome! The only one thing that could be improved would be paragraph spacing. For example, a clearer definition between flashbacks and present tense. However, overall, it's really good, and I can't wait for Chapter 2!

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unbonlgym
ok. thanks. i will work on that in future. this chapter might be a one off and there might not be anymore chapters. I am not sure yet.

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